@Kiiroe
(judging from your first verse, you found my code. Good job, you get a +heat)
Your lines kinda suck.
Normal flow, control, style
Need to work on those.
You don't just add words
So you hit syllable count.
It makes them sound dumb.
Your line's poetic,
Make them flow like you're talking
And then try again.
@ Dark Pulse
As for quality,
Take a look at my last post
I am trash talking.
Typical for games,
Talk trash to your opponents
Then beat them senseless.
(did you find my hidden message in my last post? read it one more time)
That's what hype's about.
And if I wanted to rhyme,
Trust me, I've got time.
I spend my days off
Playing Touhou games mostly
or Evo training.
Of course anyone
Can write lines with metered verse,
It's not all that hard.
What should be looked at
Is if they sound natural
As if they're spoken.
Take this post of mine,
This would fit normally
In a paragraph.
You see the verses
Because I'm spacing the lines,
But say I didn't...
then it would end up looking much more like a post. Just like Loli said, "This shit is mad lame". You're not proving anything by quantity lines. It's rather doubtful that you could 'school me' on verse, please don't waste your time. I've gone to college and I've minored in English; my focus was prose. But what I wanted was to take some classes on creative writing. While they did have some, there were a lot of pre-reqs...I really hate those. English 120 was a real waste of my time and same with 212, and then they cancelled the creative writing class. I had to take prose.
Now after all that, I've got myself a minor but it does nothing for my current job. I manage a sushi bar, schooling was useless; don't have a major and I stopped taking classes. Gen Ed classes suck. I do like to write, and prose is easy to do, and thus...my day off. After all my years, metered verses and haiku are easy to write. Oh, and FYI, metered verses and haiku are two different things. This thread is metered while haiku deals with seasons of nature and stuff. Oh, and just for fun, I made this entire post at 5-7-5. Break them up and see, I really don't care about quantity at all, but if you're counting then I have no idea how many I wrote.