Haiku Topic

[Kiiroe]

sorry Yubel

syl-la-bles  :'( the irony

Ha-ha dont worry
Its not that big of a deal
Syllables do suck

[ShinMasaki]

Yeah, I like this thread
A contest will keep it fun
All we needs some rules 

People can enter
We set up a little poll
Everyone will vote

We will all have lulz
I think we'll all have some fun
We should get on this

I think I'll play too.
Winning this will be easy.
I'm pro at word games.

Now list down your rules,
Then we can start this game up.
However, you'll see...

I'm telling you now,
Since you guys started this, don't
Go crying later.

And while we're at it,
My lines hold a hidden code.
Enigma at work.

triple haiku?

I'll see your triple,
and then I'll raise you two more.
A five-part haiku.

[Kiiroe]

I'm so sorry sir
You will never win my game
I say, fuck your code

Word games are my thing
No one can compete with me
I wont allow it

We may not like it
But we must work together
Two bitter rivals

We need sets of rules
I cant think of them myself
I might need some help

I think well do it
Our differences aside
This thread will not stop

It will never end
never, ever, ever no
I say, it will not

And I must say this
I will see your five poems
And i'll raise you two  
 

[Dark Pulse]

You folks don't get it.
It's not the volume, it's the
quality that counts.

Now, I could school you
all day long on how to write
haiku, but no thanks.

See, speaking like this
takes some time and effort so
you had best get it.

But all you two are
focused on is "quantity!"
You both make me laugh.

It's not quantity.
It's quality. Always was.
Numbers are nothing.

Anyone can write
sheer numbers of haiku, but
it don't mean you should.

Frankly, that contest
makes it seem like you two have
nothing else to do.

It's saturday night.
You should be out partying
or playing Melty.

Instead, here you are
sitting at the PC and
thinking of dumb rhymes.

So as I close this,
facepalming my head at it,
I shall say one thing.

It is quality.
That is what always counts most,
Eleven aside.

[Kiiroe]

Well, I guess you win
This will  be my last haiku
I'll see you in hell

I must say farewell
I commend you my brother
I am at a loss

My life was so short
This sad life as a poet
I knew it would end

Im sad you are right
It IS about quality
I just didnt know

Yea im sitting here
I have no melty to play
No tv to watch

No close friends to call
No family to hang with
No bed to sleep in

This took a sad turn
It took a turn for the worst
Depression sets in

Sleep will be needed
A recollection of thoughts
One small chance to rest

But dont sit judging us
Dont get on your high horse just yet
You just wait and see

About quality
One day you will see defeat
You just sit and wait

Ill be showing you
We will all be showing you
You shall be prepared

Now ill take my leave
Sorry to bore you with this
Hope you stayed awake

I know well be friends
The man who knows his words well
The man with no fail

This has been so fun
But you need to remember
How I wrote fourteen

[ShinMasaki]

@Kiiroe

(judging from your first verse, you found my code. Good job, you get a +heat)

Your lines kinda suck.
Normal flow, control, style
Need to work on those.

You don't just add words
So you hit syllable count.
It makes them sound dumb.

Your line's poetic,
Make them flow like you're talking
And then try again.

@ Dark Pulse

As for quality,
Take a look at my last post
I am trash talking.

Typical for games,
Talk trash to your opponents
Then beat them senseless.

(did you find my hidden message in my last post? read it one more time)

That's what hype's about.
And if I wanted to rhyme,
Trust me, I've got time.

I spend my days off
Playing Touhou games mostly
or Evo training.

Of course anyone
Can write lines with metered verse,
It's not all that hard.

What should be looked at
Is if they sound natural
As if they're spoken.

Take this post of mine,
This would fit normally
In a paragraph.

You see the verses
Because I'm spacing the lines,
But say I didn't...

then it would end up looking much more like a post. Just like Loli said, "This shit is mad lame". You're not proving anything by quantity lines. It's rather doubtful that you could 'school me' on verse, please don't waste your time. I've gone to college and I've minored in English; my focus was prose. But what I wanted was to take some classes on creative writing. While they did have some, there were a lot of pre-reqs...I really hate those. English 120 was a real waste of my time and same with 212, and then they cancelled the creative writing class. I had to take prose.  

Now after all that, I've got myself a minor but it does nothing for my current job. I manage a sushi bar, schooling was useless; don't have a major and I stopped taking classes. Gen Ed classes suck. I do like to write, and prose is easy to do, and thus...my day off. After all my years, metered verses and haiku are easy to write. Oh, and FYI, metered verses and haiku are two different things. This thread is metered while haiku deals with seasons of nature and stuff. Oh, and just for fun, I made this entire post at 5-7-5. Break them up and see, I really don't care about quantity at all, but if you're counting then I have no idea how many I wrote.  

[Kiiroe]

I see your no joke
I admit im no poet
I see that im lame

I am just so bored
Ive got no melty to play
I've had a bad day :/

There was a meeting
I was GONNA play melty
But I couldnt go

Ill work on this stuff
So I can come and "school" you
As Dark Pulse has said

All of us be friends
Yes, we should all get along
Even though inside

We'll whisper and plot
Soon the backstabbing will start
You will be decieved

So just watch your back
You'll never know whose a friend
This thread is not safe

[ShinMasaki]

I am just so bored
Ive got no melty to play
A bad day ive had :/

Even though I say Melty training for Evo, my PS2 broke, so I sit all day playing Touhou games instead and watching YouTube. It's always Youmu that kills my 1cc run playing PCB. Marisa is fat in MoF and she cant micro graze at all...It is frustrating, I'm trying to put all the endings up online. Can't clear PCB, MoF Marisa's fat, and 12 is too hard.   http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qIVryp8_U80

You should play Touhou, danmaku lolis are win and so's the music. The games are real fun. A great way to spend a day... At least I think so. Oh and also with PoFV, you can get the netplay feature. This will let you go and play with others online...of course with some lag. Or for the fighters, Hisoutensoku also has a netplay game. Dunno...just something that I do to spend the time without PS2. Let me promote my danmaku lolis since I like Touhou a lot.

This thread is not safe

EDIT: I lol'd

[Kiiroe]

what...

WHAT!!!

That looks so god damn hard

but for some reason... Im compelled to try 

[Dark Pulse]

I've gone to college and I've minored in English; my focus was prose. But what I wanted was to take some classes on creative writing. While they did have some, there were a lot of pre-reqs...I really hate those. English 120 was a real waste of my time and same with 212, and then they cancelled the creative writing class. I had to take prose.  

Now after all that, I've got myself a minor but it does nothing for my current job. I manage a sushi bar, schooling was useless; don't have a major and I stopped taking classes. Gen Ed classes suck. I do like to write, and prose is easy to do, and thus...my day off. After all my years, metered verses and haiku are easy to write. Oh, and FYI, metered verses and haiku are two different things. This thread is metered while haiku deals with seasons of nature and stuff. Oh, and just for fun, I made this entire post at 5-7-5. Break them up and see, I really don't care about quantity at all, but if you're counting then I have no idea how many I wrote.  

Oh, I go to college now, and I took a lot of classes in English. Including creative writing, and I've got the poetry, flash fiction, and short stories to prove it. I'm working on a Bachelor's degree now, and I think I have a fairly more verbose vocabulary than most people. Minors really don't mean jack once you have more than an Associate's Degree, anyway.

Does it mean I could school you? Maybe not; it was a bit presumptuous of me. But I'd say I got a good shot of being at least equal.

And yes, I know the distinction between metered verses and Haiku, but unarguably this thread has never been about Haikus, but metered verses. Not to mention "Metered Verses" being much harder to stuff in since that's four syllables.

Also, yes, I did find your hidden message. Very clever. To that, I have to say...



If that isn't hint enough, then I'll spell it out, but I think that should suffice. Since I always appreciate that +HEAT.

Anyway, I could try (and easily top) Kiiroe's 14, but I'm beyond caring. Plus the last thing this thread needs is posts that contain 30+ 5-7-5 metered verse posts. Let's keep them short, like 1-3 per post, kids. Reading those longer ones suck, to be honest.

I have writing to return to, anyway. One month has produced an 80,000 word, 2/3 complete fanfic. It might even show up here, sometime. As it is Melty/Tsuki related...

[Curbeh]

Shut up faggots
This here is a haiku thread
Now back on topic

[Dark Pulse]

No, it's metered verse. There's no nature in these posts. Add some leaves for that.

[LoliSauce]

I am just so bored
Ive got no melty to play
A bad day ive had :/

Even though I say Melty training for Evo, my PS2 broke, so I sit all day playing Touhou games instead and watching YouTube. It's always Youmu that kills my 1cc run playing PCB. Marisa is fat in MoF and she cant micro graze at all...It is frustrating since I am trying to put all the endings up online. Can't clear PCB, MoF Marisa's fat, and 12 is too hard.   http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qIVryp8_U80

You should play Touhou, danmaku lolis are win and so's the music. The games are real fun. A great way to spend a day... At least I think so. Oh and also with PoFV, you can get the netplay feature. This will let you go and play with others online...of course with some lag. Or for the fighters, Hisoutensoku also has a netplay game. Dunno...just something that I do to spend the time without PS2. Let me promote my danmaku lolis since I like Touhou a lot.

I like those games too.  Funny you linked that ending cuz 6 is my fave.  I play Reimu B.  Marisa's too fast for me, but I like her strength.  

The new games suck though.  I miss traditional bombs and stage restarts blow.

Oh, and Dark Pulse - Leaves.

Seriously though, I have a question for you: What's up with this post?  Shin's post was metered, even when he stopped spacing.  Yours seemed like plain talk.  If you're his equal, then you should be proving it.  Haiku at all times!

[Dark Pulse]

Those leaves were quite nice. Very nice, I must admit. Now it's a Haiku.

[rmfcouch]

Touhou 6-8 really did it for me. I made my current stick because of those games.

Shut up faggots
This here is a haiku thread
Now back on topic

Derailed haiku thread,
he hit the nail on the head.
Let's add to haiku,

the limerick too,
I wonder what will be said?
... (go H-Kohaku)

[LoliSauce]

I'll have you know, couch - though I don't space like haiku, my posts are in step.  My style is subtle, but test them out and you'll see.  My prose is legit.

[ShinMasaki]

I am just so bored
Ive got no melty to play
A bad day ive had :/

Even though I say Melty training for Evo, my PS2 broke, so I sit all day playing Touhou games instead and watching YouTube. It's always Youmu that kills my 1cc run playing PCB. Marisa is fat in MoF and she cant micro graze at all...It is frustrating since I am trying to put all the endings up online. Can't clear PCB, MoF Marisa's fat, and 12 is too hard.   http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qIVryp8_U80

You should play Touhou, danmaku lolis are win and so's the music. The games are real fun. A great way to spend a day... At least I think so. Oh and also with PoFV, you can get the netplay feature. This will let you go and play with others online...of course with some lag. Or for the fighters, Hisoutensoku also has a netplay game. Dunno...just something that I do to spend the time without PS2. Let me promote my danmaku lolis since I like Touhou a lot.

I like those games too.  Funny you linked that ending cuz 6 is my fave.  I play Reimu B.  Marisa's too fast for me, but I like her strength.  

The new games suck though.  I miss traditional bombs and stage restarts blow.

Oh, and Dark Pulse - Leaves.

Seriously though, I have a question for you: What's up with this post?  Shin's post was metered, even when he stopped spacing.  Yours seemed like plain talk.  If you're his equal, then you should be proving it.  Haiku at all times!

Ha! Nice to see that. I prefer Reimu B too, strong but not too fast. As it is, the only one I have cleared in full would be Touhou 6. Working on the rest, but it is taking some time, are you good at them? Touhous 6-8 are among the best Touhous, but 10 has Aya.

So, what do you mean by this thread being derailed? Look again closely. Loli has his post metered in 5-7-5, and then look at mine. Every single one of my posts within this thread are all metered too. The last one as well (except for the edit part) was metered correct. Same goes for this post, me and Loli are following the topic rules.

Would it be better
If I spaced out every line
In this format here?

As I was saying,
A true metered post is one
Where you sound normal.

Not unnatural
Nor awkward sounding either,
But everything flows.

Or would you rather
That I wrote a real haiku
Instead of lecture?


------


Nighttime, a full moon
Cold wind blows, the city sleeps
Dawn breaks, birds chirping


------


What's that? Too boring?
Well that was a REAL haiku
Not this metered talk.

[rmfcouch]

Shut up faggots
This here is a haiku thread
Now back on topic

I agreed with him
on the post prior to his.
(picked this thread up late)

But also notice,
it was a jab at myself.
I broke the rules too.

[Dark Pulse]

Missing my plus-heat
Makes Dark Pulse quite very sad
Like kittens in trees.

[LoliSauce]

Ha! Nice to see that. I prefer Reimu B too, strong but not too fast. As it is, the only one I have cleared in full would be Touhou 6. Working on the rest, but it is taking some time, are you good at them? Touhous 6-8 are among the best Touhous, but 10 has Aya.

I'm no lunatic, but I hard cleared 6-8.  This was in the past.  I haven't played since...probably one or two years?  My skills must have dulled.  Eleven's demo, I think, was the last I played.  It was good and bad.  I liked some of it (namely the sub characters), yet it still fell short.  The new engine's wack.  Ever since Mountain of Faith, I lost interest.  Sorry for Aya, but there's still Shoot the Bullet.  Double Spoiler, too.

Nighttime, a full moon
Cold wind blows, the city sleeps
Dawn breaks, birds chirping

Hey, where's all the leaves?  Sounds to me like you're a hack!  Go back to Type Moon.  

[MagnusXL]

Dark Pulse is a fag
He posts in like every thread
Over and over

Look at his Profile
He joined in February
His post count is huge

Nah, I'm just kidding
Dark Pulse is pretty okay
I'm just an asshole

[Dark Pulse]

My fellow asshole,
I fully understand you,
So it's all good, sir.

[ShinMasaki]

I've an idea,
How about we play a game
Using metered verse.

I will write a verse
Then the next person follows
Up with another.

But don't end your verse
With a sentence. It will go
Something like this.

So I guess I'll start. I've got a really big question to ask. What is

a man? A miserable pile of secrets. But enough talk, have

This pokeball. This
Device will help you capture
Wild pokemon.

And thus Anon2
Broke this game by ending with
A sentence. That jerk.

You can space your lines
Or you can leave it open.
But follow the rules.

Your verse must still be
Metered in 5-7-5
And must end open.

Basically this game
Will keep on going until
We hit a moron.

What do you guys say,
Do you want to try this out?
Who wants to start this?

[Cornix]

Sounds like tons of fun
Should just start us off there sir
Honour is all yours

[Dark Pulse]

I had something here.
It would fit in with above,
but let S-M start.